Naruto Savage Lands
Would you like to react to this message? Create an account in a few clicks or log in to continue.



 
HomeLatest imagesSearchRegisterLog in

 

 Muteki Ryoku (Done)

Go down 
2 posters
AuthorMessage
Muteki Ryoku
Genin
Muteki Ryoku


Posts : 18
Ryo : 2600

Ninja Info Card
Chakra:
Muteki Ryoku (Done) Left_bar_bleue160/160Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty_bar_bleue  (160/160)

Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty
PostSubject: Muteki Ryoku (Done)   Muteki Ryoku (Done) I_icon_minitimeMon Apr 02, 2012 9:43 pm



Muteki Ryoku (Done) Characterapptop


Muteki Ryoku (Done) 5688-310


Muteki Ryoku (Done) Charac10


Muteki Ryoku (Done) Person11
First Name: Ryoku
Last Name: Muteki
Gender: Male
Height: 5.6 ft
Weight: 120 lbs
Age: 13
Birthday: January 6

Village: Tsundoragakure
Rank: Genin
Elements: Raiton, Fuuton
Specializations: Taijutsu, Ninjutsu, Genjutsu


Muteki Ryoku (Done) Person12
Personality:

Ryoku absolutely loves competition, especially competitions involving fighting. To him, competition is a great way to spice up anything that is getting boring just for the fun of it. With his stubbornness and his perfectionism streak, his competitiveness can turn into downright obsession with winning and feeling good about it if the challenge is stimulating enough. Even when the odds are against him, if he is competing for something then his stubbornness will kick into overdrive and make him never back down, making this one of his most dangerous traits to both his allies and his enemies alike.

The main defining trait of this shinobi is his complete and utter belief in himself and in his abilities. This absolute confidence is so massive that it is like a force of nature all on its own, being almost impossible to bend or break to someone else’s will and mercy. This powerful belief in himself was forged through a life of hardships and pain.

Ryoku temper is actually very near legendary due to its explosiveness and vindictiveness when triggered. He has very low tolerance for insults and its ilk, and such often gets agitated every time someone insults him when he isn’t on a mission that requires him to stay calm. When angered, he becomes very malicious and even more unpredictable than he usually is… but he also loses his sense of good reason and often ends up doing very stupid things. Thus, this trait is considered both his greatest strength and his greatest weakness due to how easily his friends and enemies can exploit it to their side’s advantage, something that Ryoku knows all too well.

Ryoku is Hyperactive. A trait made more prominent by his youth. Not only that, but he also has a naturally powerful and energetic disposition along with a very powerful drive to excel in everything that he is interested in. Those traits blend in him and turn into pure unbridled enthusiasm and zest for life and its pleasures. In fact, he has so much enthusiasm and energy for everything that it is very hard to force himself to sit still for any length of time because he is so proactive to the point of being hyperactive. While most people admire this great enthusiasm of his from afar… these same people are repelled by it up-close because Ryoku has this tendency to be too enthusiastic. Most people often can’t keep up with his boundless energy and overenthusiastic demeanor and therefore they don’t even bother trying and just try to stay far away from him to avoid headaches.

He also has a High level of intelligence. This high-level intelligence is actually rather unorthodox, something he had adopted from his tenant after seeing that the unexpected worked much better than the normal line of thinking. It is his smarts that allowed him to create his own techniques and think up of strategies and tactics that would be advantageous for him and his team in most situations. This type of thinking has gotten him out of a lot of tight situations… as well as gotten him into even more of said situations due to miscalculations, intentions, and assumptions. Book smarts-wise though, he is only average, preferring to excel in the combat arena instead.
Likes: Ryoku is the type of boy who loves to fight it out. He would fight anyone,any size, any rank. Just to prove that anyone can be beaten even him, and at times that he does lose he will learn from it very quickly learning to never make that mistake again. Ryoku loves Girls with sexy hair. This is one of Ryokui fetishes he loves a female with great sexy looking hair, no matter the color if it's wild and not like others he would jump and try to please the girl rather quickly.
Dislikes: Ryoku hates people who does not fight,why?, because there the opposite of him, and Ryoku just does not like anything opposite of him....unless a girl is an non-fighter to which he would lay down and try to flirt with her,like a bitch. Ryoku also hates people who are weak minded, and can't defend or fight for themselves,why?, because there not like Ryoku who will fight anyone..anywhere.
Motivation: Ryoku is known to be born outside of his village which made the Academy Students get a head start in front of him in every specialization. Ryoku now strives to become stronger than those of his class, and prove to everyone in his village that he is a very strong shinobi. Another Motivation that Ryoku had was that he strives to become a Stronger Taijutsu master than his grandpa, and master more of the Style his grandpa had taught him. Besides just becoming a better Taijutsu Master than his grandpa, Ryoku wanted to show the whole world that he should be claimed the Taijutsu Master.
Fears: Like any other of the wild shinobi's fears his main one is Dieing. Ryoku has never seen the death of a shinobi before, and this is why he closes his eyes when he draws blood onto the target. Another one of Ryoku's fears is of him running Out of Chakra, and Passing out in the process. Even though Ryoku loves to fight he is afraid of seeing himself pass out because he doesn't know where his mind is taking when he's knocked out/passed out. The last fear about Ryoku is that he hates to be Rejected by girls or a girl that plays hard to get. Ryoku loves to talk to them, but because of his good looks he has never been rejected or have a girl play hard to get.


Muteki Ryoku (Done) Clan10
Clan Name Here

Bloodline: N/A
Bloodline Ability: N/A
Location: N/A
Clan History: N/A


Muteki Ryoku (Done) Histor10
History:

The story of a lonely Taijutsu warrior started Thirteen years ago around the outskirts of Tsundoragakure. A hidden place where only two tan tents, and a building stood. Birth was Happening in this tent. The Family of Four watched as Cucumber roared in pain, and spread her legs open across the small rug rolled out on the floor. Plague- the grandpa of the family held Cucumber's hand, and gently pulled out the baby. The other two that were gathered around to watch the birth of Ryoku were Muteki Shiba- Ryoku's oldest brother, and Muteki Koujagi- Ryoku's dad. After the birth of Ryoku, Cucumber wrapped him up in a blue cloth. She rocked him back and forth as she admired the baby. "Child..I don't expect you to grow up and not respect the Muteki family name. Show others that a person with no Kekkei Genkei can still be great" whispered Cucumber. Ryoku giggled, and frowned. He was young, and couldn't even talk yet t but the words would surely enough be remembered.

At the Age of Five the small civilization Ryoku had with his family became bigger. It had turned into somewhat like a town or village. There was more people, buildings, and supplies for the Muteki to last on. Ryoku couldn't quite yet walk around the village yet. He only stayed inside of the same tent that he was born in. Many people would of thought that he would have became Claustrophobic, but Ryoku had never seen the sun or moon yet. He was stuck inside a house filled with chewed up fruit, and water containers. This was the reason for Ryoku growing strangely larger than other shinobi his age, and also because of his Grandpa who was a Taijutsu Master.

Both of his parents were non-shinobi, so as a child he had no desire to become one himself. He didn't even know of shinobi at the time, except that he saw them come through town every few weeks. However, just cause he knew his parents weren't shinobi, did not mean the blood of one didn't run through his veins. One day, as he was about 10 years old, he was playing with a metal rod with his friends. They were all pretending to be samurai while hitting each other playfully with the rods. As he lost a grip on his, something miraculous happened. He held his hand out to it, about ready to run to get it before it suddenly wobbled, and flew through the air into his hand. Everyone stopped and stared. He dropped it and ran home as quickly as he could. He told his parents about the incident. His father was about ready to start beating him for being some sort of oni before his mother screamed to stop. She had the look of guilt on her face as she explained that her grandfather was a shinobi. He was a strong shinobi from Tsundoragakure, a village not far from them. His father, furious, decided to send him off to live with his grandpa, as he wanted nothing to do with Shinobi. His mother, reluctant, took him to meet his grandfather.

Ryoku arrived in Morigakure and when the situation was explained to the Kage at the time, he was allowed into the village to live with his grandfather while his mother went back to live in the small town. His grandfather was happy to see another shinobi-in the making in the family, especially one that shared the same ability as he- Wrestling Taijutsu Skills. He wasted no time in catching Tetsuma up in all the training he needed. He was entered into the academy when he was 9 years old and graduated when he was 13. He was hailed as the slow bloomer of the village because he wasn't too good at Ninjutsu, but as soon as he was out of the academy, his grandfather took him back underneath his wing to teach him everything he knew. The training was non-stop. He didn't even have time to go on missions. Ryoku's grandfather made sure he knew how to master the ways of the Wrestling Taijutsu, so he decided to send him into the Wrestling Dojo for weeks.

When Ryoku had finished his training in the Wrestling Dojo he had turned all of the fat from laying down in the tent into muscle which lead to strength, and speed. He also had learned a very familiar technique named Lariat. Now that he was more athletic he was able to complete missions and perform Taijutsu techniques faster, and even almost defeat his grandpa in battle. His brother was so strong because of his higher skill in Ninjutsu. He was the most experienced in Ninjutsu out of the whole family. Ryoku had figured this out, and used this as a motivation to become stronger.

[center]-800 Words-

RP Sample: Water splashed repeatedly as the crowded wooden boat rocked back and forth as if someone was holding a baby and trying to put it to sleep. The boat was headed for Kumogakure. One of the most admirable villages there had ever been seen. That was maybe the reason why so many people had boarded this boat. But one person on this boat was different than the other people that had hopped onto the boat. He was special. His name was Tsubasa Reikon - Sanin of Kumogakure.

The yellowed haired man sat on the side of the boat with a red and gold scroll tied towards his back and his training outfit on, not his normal armor because on the boat people were not allowed to wear any type of metal. So Reikon had left it in his black book bag that was also over lapped with the scroll around his back. He was traveling with so much armor, and weapons. All that he had brought back from his home town Bassai. Bassai mocked the Five Great Nations and never suspected for one of their kin to become a shinobi from one of those villages. But since Reikon was believed to be the prophecy of the island, they allowed him to go and now it was time for him to return from his training.

Bong Bong Bong! The captain pulled the bell down to alert the villagers and shinobi that the boat had finally docked near the gates of Kumogakure. Reikon hopped up from sitting on the boats edge, and began to walk to the exit of the boat. Many people pushed and shoved people as they waited for the captain to push down the small piece of wood slide. "Thank you for boarding the best boat company in the Nation, have a safe day" said the captain as he used one of his legs to kick the wooden slide down. People pushed and shoved even harder as they tried to get off the boat in a fast motion. Reikon stayed in the back waiting for everyone to get off because he knew that if one of them was to touch him, he would try to fight them. His anger was too much to handle for anyone that was around him on the boat.

Reikon stepped off the boat and looked around at where he was in Kumogakure. The Kumogakure Entrance Gates was just nearby. "So Im at the gates of Kumogakure, how splendid, guess it's time to get going" said Reikon as he took a deep breath before strolling towards the gate. The gate hadn't had any guards at the gate when he arrived. That was awkward there must have had been something going on inside of the village, and he was late or an intruder could have plucked them off as if they were little flies.

Reikon shrugged as he looked at the not guarded gate. So many shinobi could be trying to invade us right now, how lame thought Reikon. He continued walking, to end up passing the entrance and stand just in front of the village. It was quiet around the village entrance, but he heard the sound of foot steps planting into the dirt and dust trail to Kumogakure tower. Reikon ear twitched as he heard the sound of coughing as well. Who was hear and what was he for? Reikon had knew their was something up. "Who's hear" said Reikon, widening his eyes and throwing up a familiar fighting stance. He turned in a 360 degrees to scan the area until he found the male. He looked just like a missing ninja. He didn't even have the village symbol of Kumogakure.

Intruder..was the words that ran through Reikon's head. Reikon kept his distance away from the man to make sure he wouldn't try and surprise attack him."Who are you and why are you walking through the gates of Kumogakure, your not allowed through there without permission or a village sign, seems like your a Missing Nin eh?" asked Reikon. Reikon took the black book bag off his back and dropped it to unsheathe his Golden Lightning Claws. He sheathed them onto his hands and got back in his fighting stance. "Unless you don't want to get hurt, I say you mines well leave bub because you don't want to see my bad side so come on try me" said Reikon.



Last edited by Muteki Ryoku on Tue Apr 03, 2012 7:58 am; edited 1 time in total
Back to top Go down
Muteki Ryoku
Genin
Muteki Ryoku


Posts : 18
Ryo : 2600

Ninja Info Card
Chakra:
Muteki Ryoku (Done) Left_bar_bleue160/160Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty_bar_bleue  (160/160)

Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty
PostSubject: Re: Muteki Ryoku (Done)   Muteki Ryoku (Done) I_icon_minitimeMon Apr 02, 2012 11:14 pm

Finished and Ready to be Checked
Back to top Go down
Skar
Tsurukage
Skar


Posts : 357
Ryo : 12806

Ninja Info Card
Chakra:
Muteki Ryoku (Done) Left_bar_bleue320/320Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty_bar_bleue  (320/320)

Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty
PostSubject: Re: Muteki Ryoku (Done)   Muteki Ryoku (Done) I_icon_minitimeTue Apr 03, 2012 12:11 am

I'll be going over this with you.

For starters, your motivation is going to need to be longer. This is a pretty big part of the app, it describes the meaning of your character's existence. Also, everything is to be in paragraph format, so fix the "Fears" section accordingly.

Also, if it's not too much to ask, your history is littered with typoes and grammar mistakes. I'm not very picky with people about this, because it's usually not a big deal, but there's some points in there where I can't even understand what you're saying.

Please make the proper edits, as well as fixing some of those grammatical errors so that it makes more sense, and we'll get to the approvals and what not.
Back to top Go down
Muteki Ryoku
Genin
Muteki Ryoku


Posts : 18
Ryo : 2600

Ninja Info Card
Chakra:
Muteki Ryoku (Done) Left_bar_bleue160/160Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty_bar_bleue  (160/160)

Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty
PostSubject: Re: Muteki Ryoku (Done)   Muteki Ryoku (Done) I_icon_minitimeTue Apr 03, 2012 7:59 am

Edited.
Back to top Go down
Skar
Tsurukage
Skar


Posts : 357
Ryo : 12806

Ninja Info Card
Chakra:
Muteki Ryoku (Done) Left_bar_bleue320/320Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty_bar_bleue  (320/320)

Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty
PostSubject: Re: Muteki Ryoku (Done)   Muteki Ryoku (Done) I_icon_minitimeTue Apr 03, 2012 8:39 pm

Much much better. Very legible, very readable, flows nicely, nothing's canon, everything is in paragraph format, and the history comes out at 802 words.

Good job, Ryoku.

APPROVED
Back to top Go down
Sponsored content





Muteki Ryoku (Done) Empty
PostSubject: Re: Muteki Ryoku (Done)   Muteki Ryoku (Done) I_icon_minitime

Back to top Go down
 
Muteki Ryoku (Done)
Back to top 
Page 1 of 1
 Similar topics
-
» [Metsuki Ryoku/ Jutsu Registration]

Permissions in this forum:You cannot reply to topics in this forum
Naruto Savage Lands :: Shinobi Info Cards :: Character Creation :: Approved Characters-
Jump to: